The story confused me a bit...
Was the cop the victim in the beginning? Or a past victim before this one? Or after? You talk about the blade. Hinting he had stabbed his victim, and that they were dead. Then you jump over to the cop.
If you don't mind suggestions.. if they aren't the same victim, try to get them more of a past tense, and transition.
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He is thinking about that officer. Why didn’t she resist? Why didn’t she pull the trigger?
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He begins to think back. That officer... why didn't she resist? Why didn't she pull the trigger?
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Other than that, it's a good story o: I just got confused on the victim(s).